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Veronica, overall I think that your essay is good. You need to work on making your paragraphs a little longer. You should also make sure that the paper is in mla format. As I was reading your essay I found that you really do not make a clear argument as to what side of the debate you are on. You talk about the pros and cons of soylent but you do not say what your view on the matter is. You should try and support your point more. It seems like you are briefly mentioning some problems with soylent and skipping right over them instead of talking about the problem and putting your view of things into the essay
Katelyn, overall I think your essay is very well. You have a couple grammar errors you need to fix regarding commas and what not. Next I would like to point out that I don’t really see a clear thesis is your essay saying what side of the argument you are on. You talk about the pros and cons in your essay and you do not really state what side you agree more with. You also need to incorporate some quotes from the text and explain those quotes. They should be quotes that back up your thesis. I also think you can go into more detail on how soylent destroys the social aspect of food. As I read your essay I still could not figure what side of the argument you were on try to make that more clear in your essay.
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